Band 5
IELTS Academic Task 1 Band 5 sample answer 2
A real candidate answer at Band 5, with every examiner correction marked on it. 33 corrections.
A Band 5 answer is not a bad answer. It is an answer where the meaning mostly gets through but the errors are frequent enough to interrupt the reader.
Band 5 is where the largest number of candidates sit, and it is the band with the clearest route out, because the problems are visible rather than subtle.
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The task
The Task 1 report question
The chart this describes is noted below.
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The chart below shows how people travelled to work in 1996 and 2001.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The answer
The report as the candidate wrote it
Reproduced exactly as written, errors included.
The chart the different modes of transportation used by the people in Grahamston on their way to work in the 1996 and 2001.
It is that , of the people in Grahamston drove their own car or truck to work. about 58% in 1996 and increased to 68% in 2001. In the 1996, the transportation was a car or truck and followed by private vehicle pasengers with 12% and a difference of 2% with the of public transport 10%. The two least of transport in Grahamston walking with 7% and 2%. There were about 6% people in Grahamston that worked at home.
In 2001, there was an of 10% in using on their way to from 58% to 68% in 1996 and 2001 accordingly. There was a slight of 3% in working at home reaching up to 9%. with regards using is an of only 1%. There was almost half of the people public transport from 10% in 1996 to 5% in 2001. number of people walked to worked with 7%.
In , of the people in Grahamston travelled to work by car or truck in 1996 and 2001 and there was number of people who stayed at home for with 6% in 1996 and 9% in 2001. The were only people who used the other modes of transportation.
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Examiner comments
Why this is a Band 5 Academic Task 1 answer
The overall verdict, criterion by criterion.
The first problem here is that the report is too long, and there are a number of minor errors with prepositions ('of only 2%') and structure. There is also too much repetition of key information. Basic grammar forms have a number of errors (there was an increased) and even simple plurals have been missed (the two least mode of transportation). There are a number of significant spelling errors and some of the language used is inappropriate (an inclined number of people). However, there is a clear overview and the writer has identified and expressed the main trends.
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